(You’ll need to make a copy of this.)
Your writing needs to be on the Year 10 Persuasive Writing 2018 Google Doc in your google Drive.
Points FOR
They are playing a game which is recreational.
Playing sports doesn’t contribute to our society in a way which will help others
If one sportsman gets paid then everyone else should too,
resulting in unnecessary spending.
Paying sportsmen will encourage people to grow up and,
instead of doing something that will help others, play sports.
Points AGAINST
Sportsmen work hard to be ‘game ready’ and do their best for those they are playing for.
3) Gathering of ideas. List your points in order of your best to least below.
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4) Organise your ideas (pick your best 4 points for or against,
and 1 other point arguing to opposite viewpoint):
1. Playing sports doesn’t contribute to our society in a way which will help others
2. Paying sportsmen will encourage people to grow up and, instead of doing something that will help others, play sports.
3. If one sportsman gets paid then everyone else should too, resulting in unnecessary spending.
4. Sportsmen work hard to be ‘game ready’ and do their best for those they are playing for.
5.They are playing a game which is recreational.
5) Write your essay based on the template below.
You may wish to use copy and paste this onto your Google Doc to help you plan and organise your writing.
Introduction:
Catch ‘em: Sports have been a part of lives for centuries,
perhaps millenniums,
helping us to learn and practice skills that apply to not only the games,
but our lives as a whole..
Thesis: Sports are activities which we can learn from,
be social and bring pride but sportsmen don't need paid for these activities.
List of reasons/points/ideas: Playing sports doesn't help others,
paying people for playing encourages people to use their skills which don't contribute to society,
causes unnecessary spending and inequality,
and pays certain people for participating in a recreational activity.
Body:
1 S Paying people to play sports rather than contributing to society in a positive way is a waste of time and money.
E Playing sports as a hobby is common but being paid to participate in a recreational
hobby rather than focusing your time and effort into a career or education that will help others or yourself
is not a good idea.
X Focusing all your effort into paid sports rather than using it as recreation,
and focusing on a career will almost ensure you lack skills and habits used in the real world.
The moment you get injured or become, in some way, unable to compete, you are struggling.
Well known athletes can make decent amounts of money but that takes years to achieve.
Y Encouraging younger generations that this is what you should aspire to be,
an athlete whose career could end in a second, is not a good message.
2 S Having our youth aspire to be sports players rather than something that will help others will make our
country suffer.
E If everyone who wants to be a paid sports play becomes one,
there will be deficiencies in other careers such as medical professionals, lawyers, teachers ect.
Focusing all your energy on something that will only last for a short term will leave people lacking skills.
X We need these people to work in industries that will help people, families and our society as a whole.
Aspiring to be,
and putting all your effort towards becoming a paid sportsman will leave you without skills needed for other careers.
Y Despite the deficit in other skills, paid athletes work exceptionally hard to get where they are.
3 ( rebuttal)
S Sportsmen work extremely hard to train their bodies and minds to compete to the best of their ability.
E Athletes devote their time and effort to be the best they can be, sacrificing their body and time.
They work hard to achieve their goals.
X Sportsmen train regularly for the spot, as well as conditioning their bodies to be 'match ready'.
They devote hours a week to be better than they once were, all ways improving.
Y At the end of the day, they are devoting themselves to something that will not last long,
something which normally a game. They devote themselves to a recreational activity.
4 S Despite all their efforts, sportsmen are only participating in a recreational activity and shouldn't be getting paid for it.
E Following the logic that people can be paid for recreational activities, should people be paid for shopping, walking?
Of course not, that sounds ridiculous right? Then why are people getting paid for playing games?
X Sportsmen are focusing all their effort and getting paid to win a match, not on helping others.
The top sportsmen get paid up to five million dollars every year. This is ridiculous.
Y Money is being wasted on people playing sports, not helping us in any way.
Conclusion:
Restate thesis:Sports are activities which we can learn from,
be social and bring pride but sportsmen don't need paid for these activities.
Restate List of reasons: Paying for people to play sports has no positive impact on others.
It trains people to devote their effort into something which will not help them,
causes unnecessary spending and is just paying people to play a game.
Punch line: In conclusion, paying people to participate in sports does not help society,
does not help our economy and does not help the players.